Writing

Sadie and I presented this and I really like the depth behind this poem even though it comes off as very simple. This piece of writing that a student does for a teacher and the commentary she gives back represents how much grammar a teacher looks at instead of the idea and creativeness behind the writing. The kid is obviously writing about a serious event in her life and the teacher doesn't even acknowledge what the student is actually saying. Even the structure of the how the child writes with the uneven spacing between words and the wrong spelling of such words as "agenst" and "dor" show that the child comes from background or home. The teacher even mentions that maybe next time the student will have "more to say" which is ridiculous because what the child is saying has a lot to say about the child's home life and a very violent memory in this kid's mind. The piece almost has some irony because sometimes grammar is so focused on when the idea behind the piece should be more important and here the teacher is saying that the child didn't write enought. This piece is very depressing but true.